(An alien from outer space at a swimming
pool late at night and a secret needs to be confessed to someone)
SPLASH! I have crashed onto planet earth, it’s late at night and i'm soaked. I’ve crash landed into a pool.
I got out of the pool and look for a way
out, the only way out is up and over the fence. Over the fence I go, across the
grass and off into the night. I walk for what feels like ages and then I come
across these two men. They are taking photos of each other; it seems that they
are travelling in a RV. I come out of the shadows trying not to make a sound,
“Hi my name is Peter, take it easy, I’ve come from planet Zergos and I need
your help”. One laughs and passes out, he hits the ground with an almighty thud
and the other laughs and then starts to go mental. “What is your name” I asked,
he whimpered “um my name is Dale, please don’t hurt me”. “I’m not going to hurt
you, you idiot, please can you help me”. He said “do you want to come with us”
with a whimpery look on his face? I accepted his kind offer and I helped him
carry the unconscious man onto the RV. After we had got the fat man onto the RV
we started heading down the road and me and my new friend Dale talked, and he
was asking all these different questions like what’s my planet like, and how
long do I live for and all the other questions a human would want to know about
an alien life form.
Somehow Clyde, the man that passed out, had
awoken and he lunged at me, strangling me with his hands tightly around my neck,
“STOP, I come in peace” I frantically yelled, Dale was also yelling at Clyde telling him to stop. He
let go, and I was panting for air, he was scared and started to ask question
like where had I came from and practically all the same questions as Dale. He
even asked me if I was here to harvest people’s farts, I was so insulted! We
had been travelling for a few hours, and now that Clyde was driving he wanted to
pull over for the night. So we stopped in at an RV park, in the middle of no where
and parked in bay 26. Us and a few other RV’s had decided to stop in at the
park, but all you could hair were the cicadas and a light wind rustling the
trees overhead. There was an outdoor BBQ, ground fire and a couple logs for us
to sit on just behind bay 26. As Clyde cooked up some steaks on
the BBQ, Dale and I got the fire started. After eating all we could, with our
hunger fulfilled we lay down looking up at the sky. Dreaming of our fantasies.
Early the next morning, “Bang, bang, bang on the RV door, “Clyde get the door” I said to
him still half asleep. It was Wendy the RV park owner, she had come to collect
the overnight stay payment. We payed her and hit the road pretty quick, we
stopped at the next town to fill up with gas and get a few snacks for our long
trip that was still to come. As Clyde was filling up the RV with
gas a policeman rolled up and parked in the gas stations car park. He was
questioning about an incident at a school pool in the last town, after he was
done talking to the shop keeper, about any funny coincidences he came outside
and was talking to Clyde . He asked Clyde if he had seen anything
unusual. Clyde just stared at the ground making no eye contact shaking his head
and turned back to the RV and so did Dale, they both hurried back without being
to obvious. All you could hear was our tires squealing as we pulled out of the
gas station and sped off down the highway.
“So what are you actually doing here Peter”
Dale and Clyde asked. “I’m here because I
have to tell you guys something” I exclaimed. “Well what is it?” Dale asked,”
this may seem a bit absurd but I have been summoned here to take Dale McCarthy
and Clyde Harris back to my planet, So we need to head for The Grand Canyon and
that’s where the mother ship will pick us up.” “Oooooh no that’s not good, so
you’re taking us back with you, what do they want with us”. “Yes and I’m not
sure” so we need to hurry up and get to the Grand Canyon quick
smart. Dale started to speed up and we still had an hour and a bit to go. We
had travelled many miles through desert and long straight highways so far and
we still had 50 or so miles to go. We arrived at the Grand
Canyon , 1 hour and a half later and we went through the gates. We
parked up in the parking lot and we then stepped outside into the glaring sun.
We ran to the observation deck and I then started to meditate. This meditation
alerts my planet that I am ready to be picked up. We were there for about ten
minutes when we heard a huge loud rumbling sound coming from the sky. “That’s
the mother ship I said to Dale and Clyde ”, they were both
speechless. We looked up and it was HUGE, with bright lights shining, lighting
up the whole canyon, it let down a huge tunnel that sucked us up in an instant.
We were standing at the window when Clyde asked “What about our
clothes and belon” Mate where were going you don’t need clothes or belongings
mate”.
Haha, great start!
ReplyDeleteSome punctuation issues, for example: "you idiot, please can you help me”. He said “do you want to come with us”? I"
Check here for how to use commas http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/commas.htm
Quite often you put a comma and 'and' and you don't need both (wow, heaps of and's).
Interesting story, I like it :)